HAIKU: Criticism, Plz!

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Hello there! J

The haiku served below is what my comment line “Criticism is the genuine window….” on one of your posts has led me to. Enjoy it and make some critical remarks as well, as suggested by the title!

Ha-ha-ha!! J

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Criticism, Plz!

Your criticism

My genuine correction

Make me grateful, Please!

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Life: A Journey!

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Hello everybody!
Just trying to give the continuity to what the blog demands and what it has been shaped for! On reviewing my comments on your blogs, I got to have an idea to compose a HAIKU on going through the comment lines "Jeendagi hai ye ek safar, akele hi jeene ke liye; khair, milte rahenge hum, ek din bichhadane ke liye." And its English translation as I have tried is-
"Life is a journey that we are to lead alone, anyway.

Let’s continue HELLO’s and HI’s just to separate one day."

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Life: A Journey!

It starts with a cry

Continues with tears and smiles

Ends with moans around!

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Too Hard to Hold!

Now "Too Hard to Hold", a part of my comment on a blogger friend's post, ushered me to the following HAIKU for you to enjoy and evaluate. :)

Orphan’s life by birth
Can’t say what mom’s love is like

Cry – too hard to hold!

Day breaks promising

Moments leave me un-cared-for

Cry – too hard to hold!

Getting drowned in pains

Hopes wander as homeless tramps

Cry – too hard to hold!

Heart broke to pieces

Soul irreparably hurt

Cry – too hard to hold!